Lady of Fire

Hi all! I am happy say that I am back and I apologize for being away for forever. I am rewriting this, due to the fact my writing has gotten ...

Well, most people got what I was going to say. All and all, this was a good piece that I'm sure many people can relate with. Great job. :D

I really like this. It is well written and interesting to read. Just one suggestion though. Try to make the news that Jay was going to break up with her ...

I really like this story. It is very interesting and a fun read. I greatly enjoyed it. It is defiantly unique and I like it a lot.

Wow, didn't see that coming. Defeinatly a surpise but I liked it. You kept the reader interested and could relate to your character. And I must say, I love the ...

Oh my gosh, you brought me to tears! I'm whipping tears off my keyboard right now! This was a very good story and I could easily seeing this in a ...

Thank you all for the critique. I hope you will read chapter 1 and chapter 2 ^^

ok, i fixed the king some and i added that they were in the stables. im still alittle bit iffy to change the discription of Trygg though. When i discribe ...

Thank you all for the reviews. As of this chapter, the main characters have not been intorduced. Hannah and James are important characters but they are not the main characters. ...

Thank you all for the critique, its really helpful. The story has been updated and i hope to get more adivce. Few things to certain individuals: Night Mistress: You find ...

ok, story has been edited and i would like to thank aloe for giving me all of those good tips. and about ur last comment aloe, who said anything about ...

thanks. the reason, i think, it sounds like this is because when i envision the scene, i see it like a movie and discribe it like that. to me discribing ...

actually, i did mention it. Thainnahindu Wellmu Gwelu was a squire under his father, Sir. Mounlyei Ena Gwelu of the Burning Star, Ceifene. I didn't expand on it but I ...

ok, i fixed chapter 2 so everyone can read it now. just for ANOUTHER update. ^-^

wow, i got shivers down my spine. this was soo good. i don't care how long ago it was posted, if it can send sivers up and down the spine ...